Talk:Alexander Luria/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Looie496 (talk · contribs) 16:23, 9 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Felix, I'm delighted to review an article on somebody so important to me, and I really enjoy the chance to learn more about his life. I haven't gone through the article in detail yet, but superficially it doesn't look like many changes will be needed. One thing that occurs to me even after a superficial reading is that it would be nice for the "books" section to include brief subsections on his most important books, particularly The Mind of a Mnemonist and The Man with a Shattered World. Best regards, Looie496 (talk) 16:23, 9 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

In Early education and move to Moscow, there is a quote from Homskaya: "Luria demonstrated that syntagmatic verbal connections appear earlier in ontogenetic development than paradigmatic connections. This was an important discovery for neurolinguistics." No reader is going to understand that. It should either be rewritten to be understandable or else deleted. Looie496 (talk) 16:39, 9 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

At numerous points in the article, direct quotes from Homskaya are used where they really aren't appropriate. Generally a direct quote should only be used if the specific wording in the source is important. That isn't the case for most of these. Some could actually be deleted without losing anything important, but most of the others should be reworded in a form that does not use direct quotation. Looie496 (talk) 20:05, 10 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

In Multiculturalism and neurology, first sentence, the word "prescient" is not quite right. Literally it means, "having or showing knowledge of events before they take place". I am going to take the liberty of removing that word, and also another unnecessary word from the same paragraph. Please feel free to revert if you disagree. Looie496 (talk) 20:13, 10 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

In the same section, how about giving a brief definition of aphasia? Looie496 (talk) 20:16, 10 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Note: This review is not complete, but I am going to place it on hold because Felix has not edited since Jan 3, or responded to requests for communication. If he does not participate, this review can't proceed. Looie496 (talk) 15:30, 12 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Unfortunately I have to fail the GA nomination due to lack of response. Looie496 (talk) 16:37, 24 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]