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Alas! and Did My Saviour Bleed

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... that the 18th-century hymn "Alas! and Did My Saviour Bleed" has been criticised for its reference to worms?

Source: Several examples in the article, including Coughlin, No More Jellyfish (2008), p. 101: "Many believers were given what's called worm theology. The name comes from the Isaac Watts hymn "Alas! And Did My Saviour Bleed," one line of which says, "Would He devote that sacred head for such a worm as I?"

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Mystery Merrivale (talk) 17:16, 11 May 2024 (UTC).

I am willing to review this later today. Please think about rephrasing the hook or find a different one, because it's not just a reference to worms which was seen as a problem, but that the singer has to call himself or herself a worm. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:43, 18 May 2024 (UTC)

Interesting detailed article, on fine sources, offline sources accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. I have the above problem with the hook, and actually the lead, where it says "described as a worm". I think it's key that the singer says it in the first person, referring to their own person, - not just to some worm. Perhaps just quote the complete phrase?

In the article, please check all quotation for punctuation that doesn't belong within the quote. I am also not sure about the capitals in the title, because - per this being the incipit (or first line), you could also have sentence case, as at least one source has (and hymnary.org seems undecided, having both on one page). Nice to meet you! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:51, 18 May 2024 (UTC)