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In the last six weeks the article has been comprehensively updated to make it ready for GA. Its undergone a complete reference check and update, several sections rewritten, several sections added, images added, infobox updated and lede rewritten. We are now wondering if it ready for GA. We would like some general feedback on its state, any problems with the size of the article, the number and placement of images, problems with prose and other standout problem that come to mind. Its not had an external copyedit yet.

Thanks, scope_creepTalk 17:42, 13 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720[edit]

Comments after a quick skim.

  • There are some list items in the "Crafts" section that need citations.
  • WP:ARTICLESIZE says at above 9,000 words, the article should be considered for a trim. This article is at 13,000. You might want to consider what can be removed or summarised.
  • "Allioui, Youcef (2006)." There isn't an inline citation pointing to this source. It should either be used as a citation or taken out of the Bibliography.
  • Why aren't the sources in the "Further reading" section used in the article? Consider using these or removing them from the article.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 00:27, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720: Thanks for posting that. Interesting reading. Do GA or FA articles not have further reading sections? I didn't know that. scope_creepTalk 08:14, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Scope creep: GA articles will commonly have Further reading sections which are not a big deal. However, reviewers at FAC will question why potential sources are listed in Further reading and not used in the article, as if a source is valuable enough to be in further reading it should usually be used as an inline citation instead. Z1720 (talk) 22:05, 18 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Z1720: I never knew that, but at the same time never taken anything to FAC so I guess its a learning experience. We will address it. scope_creepTalk 03:05, 19 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Matarisvan[edit]

Hi scope_creep, some comments:

  • The Igawawen flag on the article and here are very different, consider using the former?
  • Corsair, Aruj and Hayruddin are linked in lead, consider linking in body on first use?
  • Translate Beylerbey using lit/trans templates?
  • Link to Peñon (de Velez de la Gomera)?
  • "vanquishing Andrea Doria's Genoese": consider rephrasing to "vanquishing the Genoese fleet of Andrea Doria..." in order to avoid SEAOFBLUE?
  • Consider including the Algerian casulties in the Algiers expedition, so that readers can get an idea of the proportional cost of the battle?
  • "twarted": "thwarted"?
  • Link to Ottoman Fleet (Navy)?
  • "went so far": "went as far"?
  • "Lapento": typo I believe. Aldo consider removing the link, which has been used here for the second time.
  • "praying": "preying"?
  • "naighbors": "neighbors"?
  • Link to Alawi?
  • Link to Moulouya River?
  • Link to spahi?
  • Link to Constantine on first use?
  • "In 1775 Irish-born": "the Irish-born"?
  • "Spectacular": reword to something more neutral?
  • "with and": remove the "and"?
  • "he in fact": remove the "in fact"?
  • Explain timars as land grants?
  • Were there no administrative changes after Baba Abdi, or do we not have any surviving sources?

Will add more comments tomorrow. Matarisvan (talk) 09:58, 1 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your feedback, I have worked on those points. Nourerrahmane (talk) 19:58, 1 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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